I wrote a story for my fiction writing course and I need some feedback. You can find the story here at my other journal (specifically for this class) adverse_desires . Feel free to add this journal to your friends lists. I need followers lol. Thanks for all your help ahead of time and don't feel afraid to like, totally bash my story. Chew it up and spit it out!!! :) Although, be respectful in a constructive criticism sort of way.